Challenge 11 Wood Between Worlds Fill - Drabble Chain #2

[snitchnipped.livejournal.com]

The tree creaked and slightly shook, but no wind blew. Nothing else in the wood paid heed. The pool by its side remained still, silent.

A woman at its trunk slept, undisturbed.

Another sound, this one a long groan as the tree was suddenly tilted, leaning over the pool. A loose leaf drifted, landed in water. Ripples echoed, lightly lapping the edges.

The woman, now made to lean back, slept on.

Then, a loud crack! The tree teetered, loomed, and in a thundering crash of leaves and branches fell directly into the pool with a giant splash!

The woman woke.

Comments

[heliopausa.livejournal.com]

I love the opening of this -- the mysteriousness of the tree's movement, opening up all sorts of possibilities about why... and then that wonderfully dramatic turn -- a thundering crash in the place of unchanging silence! And the end! leaving the reader on a needle-point of unknowing... I'm hanging out for the next link in the chain!

[autumnia]

Interesting.... what caused the tree to fall? Was it old age, disease or some other mysterious event? Oh dear, I hope that woman wasn't injured by it!

[starbrowsings.livejournal.com]

So much action in 100 words, with just a tree and a sleeper! I desperately want to know what happens next (and who the woman was, and why the tree is falling over...did it rot from inside? And if so, why? Are other trees in the Wood dying?)...and this whole thing just set my imagination spinning.

[rthstewart.livejournal.com]

Oh my goodness. What happened in the quiet wood? It's great to use an omniscient and mysterious point of view so we don't know who is observing and what the cause but something is amiss and it's all so quiet and then CRASH. What happened? Is the wood ill? Will Susan have to go rescue it?

It's great to see you writing!!

[snacky]

Susan! Wake up! This is great - so intriguing! What's up with the tree? Why did it fall? What's going on?

[metonomia.livejournal.com]

First thing: I'm always impressed when someone can make a 100-word drabble dynamic and active, so you're awesome.

I love that this connects to mine but doesn't necessarily have to - the woman could be Susan, but I adore that you've left her unnamed and unknown, something of a part of the Wood now.

And I LOVE this idea of the trees falling! Whence comes the impetus? Nothing moves, no breeze, then suddenly allll the movement, it's awesome.